Your presentation and post were very good and equal, what I mean is one didn't out shine the other.
I liked the topic you picked because it bears a lot of weight and it connects to a lot of people. It was cool how you connected what was happening today with how it changed in the past. Also you showed how it connected to other topics like Sicko and how that America seems to treat sick people and birth as a buisness rather then care, which gave it more depth. Also the post was an ok read, and didn't have a choppy flow. One suggestion is you got just slightly of topic, not enough that it made the post uninteresting, but just watch for your next one. Good stuff other wise!Chris M
I thought it was interesting that you studied a topic that was specif to yourself because it gives the post a little more meaning. One reason why I wanted to read your blog is because it connected to mine, and it was cool to see how someone else looked at the same topic. Also, the way in which your post was formatted kept it interesting. Because it was an interview format along with a summary it made it more unique because most of the other blogs were in the normal format , I'm not saying that other post were bad, its just that it made yours stand out a bit more. Your post seemed a little stronger than your speech but both your speech and post were interesting. A very good project overall!
Dean,
Your topic for the speech you did was very relevant to what we were learning. Although birth is between the mother and the baby, for the most part, it was good that you looked at what it took to be the doctor of the situation. What made me want to read this blog is the fact that it was something that we didn't focus on heavily in class, from the perspective of the midwives they made it look like the OB/GYN were mindless idiots who hacked away at mothers, but your speech told that it was hard to become one and that in a way, they deserved to be the doctors they are. Some suggestions I have for you would be that your post should be as powerful as your speech but other then that the presentation was good and informative!
Thanks Stephen, I re-read my blog after i had done it and thought the same thing as your feedback, but was figured "eh, it's late it's not too off topic, where it'll throw a reader off, so f-it". But trust me my next blog, i'll be on point throughout the whole thing, but I hope you read my next blog, and tell me what you think about that one to come. Thanks again for reading my blog.
ReplyDeleteStephen,
ReplyDeleteI agree with you that the doctor (or OB/GYN) is equally as important as the mother and baby in during pregnancy and birth. I love the line where you said: "from the perspective of the midwives they made it look like the OB/GYN were mindless idiots who hacked away at mothers". I thought that this line was great. I agree with you. It feels as if each type of doctor is trying to convince people that their method of birth is the best and that everyone else's is horrible. To make my writing as powerful as my speech I will research more hardcore and surprising facts such as statistics to strengthen my argument.
Dean